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Lenor Cathleen Marquis Segal's avatar

Hey! Pretty sure I said your characters have always hated each other. ;)

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Owen McGrann's avatar

Hah! There's a fair amount of overlap in Jordan's edits with your comments. The circles diverge, but there's a pretty sizable shared part in the middle of that Venn diagram!

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Brad Miller's avatar

Eh, there were more redlines in the last contract I reviewed. 😆

But I am glad to see that things are progressing and that you see the feedback for what it is, and not as judgment of your ability as a writer.

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Owen McGrann's avatar

Hah. Yeah, this was more of a comment-fest than a redline bash!

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Brad Miller's avatar

I try to add comments to each redline I make. I have found it surprisingly easier to get changes through than if I just make the redline without explanation. Although I shouldn't really be surprised by that, since I know from psychology that giving any reason at all (even a nonsensical one) makes people more willing to let you do something such as cut in line.

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Owen McGrann's avatar

Yes, it’s a Jedi mind trick when redlining 🤣

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Owen McGrann's avatar

Thanks, Michael. One of the reasons I've tried to write this novel in public, as it were, is because I found it dispiriting to see the chasm between my initial drafts and the finished work that's been bound. Nobody writes great stuff without the work, the frustration, the dead ends. In the small chance that what I end up writing turns out to be something worthwhile, I want to leave a record of the process so that those who come after see that the finished work was not birthed from Zeus's head fully formed.

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Owen McGrann's avatar

One of the things I appreciate most about the way Jordan provided his edits is he made it clear that it's my book. His notes and comments are only that, not directives. In fact, there is only one single point when he said, "You really need to lose this." (He was right.)

Much of his feedback spurred orthogonal solutions. Just seeing things through a different perspective freed me from my myopic understanding of the book.

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